I stayed up way too late reading your story but it was so worth it. Must admit that I am very glad that I happened upon it now instead of earlier. It was wonderful to have so many chapters to plow through all at once but now I greedily want more more more.
The Spike & Harmony scene had me laughing. This part is inspired...
“‘. . . Although highly DESS-irable, you’re nothing but a pack of DESS-ensitive males who prey on beautiful women, use them, and then DESS-ert them,’” she quoted. “Just DESS-picable, if you ask me . . . .”
There is so much funny to be had between Harmony & Spike throughout this whole scene...
"You’re a real Malibu-Bloodsucking-Barbie."
"Unfortunately Dork-silla’s concept of ‘forever’ has the life-span of the time it takes to rebound from you, to a Chaos Demon, back to you, to a Fungus Demon, to . . . was there a Crustaceous Demon in there somewhere?”
“Oh, yeah, ‘cause we’re just a match made in the Second Circle of Hell!”
You have me very impressed with your story. You are writing an intelligent & extremely entertaining story. All of the character's actions & reactions so far have felt organic to me since none of them have taken me out of the story. Out of Joint has been a complete delight to read so far. Eep...it feels like I have gone on & on to you since I left a couple of comments tonight. Truly do not leave feedback like this very often. Your story is the just the kind that I hope to find but rarely do. It is the kind that makes me feel like I simply must leave feedback. I certainly hope there are more chapters in the future. You have me longing to read more. My imagination is swirling with all of the ways that Spike can screw up history in Sunnydale.
I certainly hope the Fates work in your favor. Wish you good tidings. Thank you for this very welcome tidbit of Chapter 5.
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The Spike & Harmony scene had me laughing. This part is inspired...
“‘. . . Although highly DESS-irable, you’re nothing but a pack of DESS-ensitive males who prey on beautiful women, use them, and then DESS-ert them,’” she quoted. “Just DESS-picable, if you ask me . . . .”
There is so much funny to be had between Harmony & Spike throughout this whole scene...
"You’re a real Malibu-Bloodsucking-Barbie."
"Unfortunately Dork-silla’s concept of ‘forever’ has the life-span of the time it takes to rebound from you, to a Chaos Demon, back to you, to a Fungus Demon, to . . . was there a Crustaceous Demon in there somewhere?”
“Oh, yeah, ‘cause we’re just a match made in the Second Circle of Hell!”
You have me very impressed with your story. You are writing an intelligent & extremely entertaining story. All of the character's actions & reactions so far have felt organic to me since none of them have taken me out of the story. Out of Joint has been a complete delight to read so far. Eep...it feels like I have gone on & on to you since I left a couple of comments tonight. Truly do not leave feedback like this very often. Your story is the just the kind that I hope to find but rarely do. It is the kind that makes me feel like I simply must leave feedback. I certainly hope there are more chapters in the future. You have me longing to read more. My imagination is swirling with all of the ways that Spike can screw up history in Sunnydale.
I certainly hope the Fates work in your favor. Wish you good tidings. Thank you for this very welcome tidbit of Chapter 5.